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As She Wept


Author: ChrystalR
ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126 /121 /58
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I despise men who make war, men who joins war and men who fight in a war. I despise people who hurt children.
Its weak.
SHE is god, mother nature, whomever you wish to call her. She is the one crying when children are tortured.


As She Wept


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And as a thousand red tears fell silently
while ghostly men without soul
wrote their evil in her blood

tore her heart out from within

While the baby dangeled limp in hand of man
and mothers wept by the sight
of their dying children on her ground
Under our honorable feet

As the raped women licked her blood
In an insane madness of burning dust
Fire ate their minds

No red tear fell with more weight
than those of mankind

Each carrying the sins of thousands in their hands




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Submitted on 2007-01-19 19:53:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Although it's unweildy and unpolished, there's a lot here. The imagery is very strong, and evocative, and it makes the somewhat choppy set up work. In fact, I think that's half of what makes it work. You could polish it more, but there's definitely something here. Play with it a little, I think you might have gold here.
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Clarkie | [ Reply to This ]


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