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    dots Submission Name: A Sweet, Sweet Confesiondots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is for my best friend. She is going through hard times. What she doesn't realize it that I am here to talk.


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    Please tell me why,
    Do you have to lie,
    To me,
    Cause he can't even see,
    YOu want him so bad,
    But he is not fit for a dad,
    So you find a secret surprise,
    That every dream you had now dies,
    Because you went and had sex,




    Now your pregant,
    " SO what we didn't use condom" you said it,
    YOu didn't care who you hurt,
    You didn't care if your friends eat dirt,
    Well is he going to be there?,
    Does he even care?,
    Well sence you don't need me,
    Why should I listen to your plea,




    I am here for you, you know it,
    Your like a ciggerate I can't quite,
    Well when your ready to confess,
    I'll be here waiting with your mess,
    I played apart as you did,
    Now aren't we both kids?,



    I'm so confused all the time,
    Who even cares if we ryhme?,
    I love you, thats all I have to say,
    Lets come back another day,
    I'll be here waiting in daylight,
    And you'll fly to me like a kite,



    On the wings of a dove, well go,
    No one has to even know,
    Well work out these problems,
    Cause no one can stop them,
    I love you, that's all I have to say,
    Lets come back another day,,
    I'll be here waiting in daylight,
    And you'll fly to me like a kite,
    On the wings of a dove, well go,
    Not a soul has to know.




    Submitted on 2007-01-19 21:39:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is so sad. Yet so true. I like it :)
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]


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