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    dots Submission Name: Phoenixdots
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    Author: sweet_rayne
    ASL Info:    25/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 493/464/111
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 986
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 440



    Description:
       this piece goes with Fire and Ash, if it doesnt make any sense you might try reading fire and ash and then it might, im still working on it hope you all enjoy it


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    dotsPhoenixdots
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    I thought this fire
    Burned me to ash
    When I set myself ablaze
    I never thought it
    Would not last
    But here I stand
    Whole again
    As I have been born of ash

    Like a phoenix
    I am born of ash and embers
    Becoming whole again
    My second chance
    To begin anew
    To do things right
    And live again
    Then once again
    Becoming ablaze




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 02:30:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is teriffic Joy! Love is sometimes like that! Like a Phoenix, it raises us from the ashes, only to get "burned" again!
    | Posted on 2007-01-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Joy,
    This piece has no need for revision of any kind it is beautiful in its own unfinished simplicity. It is as if you are beginning slowly to be reborn and have yet to complete the constant ritual of death and reawakening.

    Sage
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]


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