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    dots Submission Name: PANICdots
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    Author: Melora
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 175/198/128
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 1105
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 838



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       i can't do yoga. i needed something to do. the all-lowercase was intentional, so please don't mention it. i am a grammar freak in the flesh and will eat you.


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    the yogi's wife looks up from her limber flex: "now stretch, really stretch, like you're trying to touch something just out of reach."

    the class extends one sweatpant-clad leg and reaches out to touch its unanimous toes. grace sees alex's curved spine, each vertibrae a notch evident through her white shirt. and she reaches, each finger joint unhinging, every muscle unfurling, her chapped lips cracking with the sheer wave of panic. she reaches farther than anyone in the class, even the gymnasts and dancers, her small frame crunched, her organs collapsing in on themselves like babies folded in a stroller. even when the exercise is over and the rest of the united body assumes the corpse pose, the pose of relaxation, grace keeps reaching until it feels like her whole body will break.




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 08:14:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Grace (aaah! an uppercase G!) seems to be frozen in her mind. She can't release herself from her mind numbingness and her pose. And all because of this Alex.

    But why? I'm a teensy bit confused.

    Alex, you've got some splainin' to do!
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      i am sorry, but i just don't quite understand this peice... i suppose she is reaching for the other girl, but i cant quite catch this...it is out of my shpere of wisdom...perhaps you could enlighten me on the main thought process of this?

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Is it weird to say...I love the pain? I always loved pieces with descriptive body parts, and physical reactions to emotional deviousness. Adding this to my faaaves baabe.

    <3
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Waywarddaughter | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks for the comment on my piece. This story sounds like it hurts lol
    double jointed people who can flex and fold their own bodies, makes me gasp for air and be like "OUCHING all over" lol
    I see why that would be a panic, seeing something like that. I take it that was your first time seeing that in person?

    You from DC? I was from Camden NJ. I know the Ghetto life from Camden Philly Pa and know rappers from their. I mean example, a Rapper from that group D-Block.

    Peqace and this is a fav
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by thelastone | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting write
    But Honestly I feel this is more of a story and would be easier read written in a story format
    Nice Story Idea though
    This captures the mind and instantly creates a vision of a workout
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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