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    Author: Seedofbayne
    ASL Info:    19/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 55/82/27
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 156
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1372



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    Alone again
    Haunted by all your shadows
    And memories.

    Coldest rain
    Hides emotions that are pouring
    From me to you.


    All you had to say,
    Was you want me to

    Leave this life,
    Leave this life,

    And I be gone.

    The torturing
    That I put myself through within
    Won’t end.

    Dying within
    Cracking up, breaking down
    Down to nothing.

    All you had to say,
    Was you want me to

    Leave this life,
    Leave this life,

    And I be gone.

    Oh, oh, oh
    I carry on alone.

    Knowing that my dignity is strong
    If I catch it all away.

    You’d still be mine today
    But inside I’d be hollow.

    All you had to say,
    Was you want me to

    Leave this life,
    Leave this life,

    And I be gone.

    Then you walked away
    With nothing more to say
    I never felt this helpless.

    This helpless… Before
    You couldn’t carry on
    I guess you had enough.

    You made your choice
    You made your choice
    And now you fade away.

    The coldest rain
    Hides emotions that are pouring
    From me to you.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Um first peice i have ever been a lil confused ... ok lyrics i am guessing?? and ok so unrequainted love?? love that was lost or are you searching for a love which has not come yet .. I think with aome work this would make and amazing song ... xoox maybe we should put music to it
    | Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      These were really awesome lyrics. It'd be great to hear them with music. I don't really have anything negitive to say about them, they were great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]


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