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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       See if you can figure this out. It's an assignment for poetry class.


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    dotsPoemdots
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    As a raindrop falls
    swiftly down hitting
    pavement curved into potholes

    adventing creation

    the very beginning of a puddle
    no sign of water building
    first a drop then

    so suddenly

    lakes




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 13:24:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice concept of one raindrop responsible for creating a lake. Poem is fragment of the larger physic world, that we know. A poem is tender like a bird's wing. Nice stuff. Keep sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      "As a raindrop falls"

    as a rain drop

    much better i think. and i love word plays. if your poem is short, i think it can use some. i like the idea and the end. but it can use more clarity and variaty? instead of using adjectives or adverbs, give some colour. or emotion.
    maybe this wasn't what you're looking for. sorry. then.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]


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