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    dots Submission Name: Anattadots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 766
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 524



    Description:
       A friend of a friend died, which has me thinking about death. Here's my perspective.


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    dotsAnattadots
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    We fade away

    disappear

    still, nothing ever dies

    you do not play harps
    behind pearled gates

    but you are not gone

    you are
    lightning, gravity, air
    you are every

    we can converse

    rolling thunder speaks
    your words

    someday I too will

    flash

    across the sky

    a lightning bolt, a breeze, a tide

    and the thunder will roll




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 13:31:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a sweet piece and I agree with what you believe. I am a firm believer that once we die we become a part with the all, that is to say nature. I believe that nothing is lost and a person can be remembered everyday. I liked your poem and how you incorporated nature into it.

    thanks for the great read

    andrea
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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