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it's not about cutting i swear


Author: in shadow
ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581 /277 /103
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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it's not about cutting i swear



when you look at my face
do you see all the tears i cried
the one's i cried for you
i'll never tell
if you touched my heart
would you feel the pain i keep inside
a bright white consciouses crisp and clean
with one single imperfection
a drop of blood
the one regret
that never fails to steal the show
draws the eye away from all the empty space
till all you see is red
my scarlet mistake




Submitted on 2007-01-20 13:51:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww. I can feel this..And I can kinda relate..Even if you say it's not about cutting...When I read it..it brings me back to a couple of months ago..I had a big problem with cutting..I loved this.

You did a Very good job!

= ) Randa
| Posted on 2007-06-21 00:00:00 | by Randa04 | [ Reply to This ]
  :( This just makes me sad when I read it. the last line is just amazing. "my scarlet mistake" it just fits perfectly. Very good write.

<3 black rose
| Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. It's so sad and haunting in such a gorgeous way. It didn't make me think of cutting.
I really love the way you word things.

I have nothing to critique, so I guess I'll be on my way now. If I have time later, I'll read more of your stuffs.



-nikkki

Ohh and thanks for the comment
| Posted on 2007-01-31 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  i love how you say:my scarket mistake.it is so poetic and wonderfull,i really love that line!
| Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  i love it this poem i think personaly flows perfectly...... I would realy like you to coem by and check out some of my poems to and tell me what you think...

Candy
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
  This almost sounds like the person gets so mad that she kills the guy that broke up with her >.< It's an alright poem, not badly written but a little bit boring. Still, it's much better then most of the stuff I've seen on this site, hope to see more from you at some time. ^_^
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
  I finally here something with cuttin in the poem
i like the flow of it

your boy twistedMinded
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by TwistedMinded | [ Reply to This ]
  =[ i know the feeling
to be hurt so
by loving someone
and losing a lot of tears to them
i understand completely
this is an awesome peice
i really like it
i just hope no one really feels
this intensely bad =[
it sucks

denny XX

keep writing! < 3
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by given_belief | [ Reply to This ]


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