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    dots Submission Name: have u ever...dots

    Author: Kueen_Emerald
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 130/160/57
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1239
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       for this guy i have been in love with for a really long time...

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    dotshave u ever...dots

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    For someone you don’t really know
    But the first time you talked to them.
    They had you right there at ‘hello’?

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    For a completely perfect stranger
    But you wanted to get to know them
    Even though it could put you in danger?

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    For someone that you never met
    But when you started talking to them
    You knew it was something you wouldn’t regret?

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    For someone who can make you fly
    By just saying ‘baby, I love you’
    And you just know it’s not a lie?

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    For someone so perfect
    Who’s like an angel to you
    And treats you with so much respect?

    Have you ever fallen so hard
    Or as fast as you can blink, so quick
    But there’s something about him
    And you two just automatically click?

    Baby, I’ve fallen so hard
    You’re my angel from above
    God sent you to me
    To care and to love

    Submitted on 2007-01-20 16:51:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think he will love it.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was alright This topic is always written on and this really didn't stand out. 1st don't try to use the line

    "Have you ever fallen so hard" over and over.

    It's get boring it make the peice seems to last forver and it might make a reader go bla blah bla.

    If u might use some metaphors in the piece descring the way he might make you weak when you stand next to him, ur his touch when he hold you, this would really help the piece out.remeber these r just ideas. if really love him really but some thougt into it. this is just a work in progress.I'm not trying to say th is piece not horrible beceasue no piece is bad becuase every piece has somthing connected to writer. You have good start but it's just needs some work. o yeah remeber your only 16 love is a big word at this age, i already made that mistake.

    Well hope to hear from and keep writing

    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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