have u ever... by Kueen

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Author:	Kueen_Emerald
ASL Info:	17/f
Elite Ratio:	3.1 - 130/160/57
Words:	185

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1239
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1140

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for this guy i have been in love with for a really long time...

have u ever... dots

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Have you ever fallen so hard
For someone you don’t really know
But the first time you talked to them.
They had you right there at ‘hello’?

Have you ever fallen so hard
For a completely perfect stranger
But you wanted to get to know them
Even though it could put you in danger?

Have you ever fallen so hard
For someone that you never met
But when you started talking to them
You knew it was something you wouldn’t regret?

Have you ever fallen so hard
For someone who can make you fly
By just saying ‘baby, I love you’
And you just know it’s not a lie?

Have you ever fallen so hard
For someone so perfect
Who’s like an angel to you
And treats you with so much respect?

Have you ever fallen so hard
Or as fast as you can blink, so quick
But there’s something about him
And you two just automatically click?

Baby, I’ve fallen so hard
You’re my angel from above
God sent you to me
To care and to love

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i think he will love it.
| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
This was alright This topic is always written on and this really didn't stand out. 1st don't try to use the line

"Have you ever fallen so hard" over and over.

It's get boring it make the peice seems to last forver and it might make a reader go bla blah bla.

If u might use some metaphors in the piece descring the way he might make you weak when you stand next to him, ur his touch when he hold you, this would really help the piece out.remeber these r just ideas. if really love him really but some thougt into it. this is just a work in progress.I'm not trying to say th is piece not horrible beceasue no piece is bad becuase every piece has somthing connected to writer. You have good start but it's just needs some work. o yeah remeber your only 16 love is a big word at this age, i already made that mistake.

Well hope to hear from and keep writing

Max
Aka
Lil'Mix
| Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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