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See to realize

Author: jermwerm
ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My girlfriend left me to chase the dope bag and I now realize she's been lieing to me since the day I met her. She was just useing me and playing with my emotions.

See to realize

So now I see the truth to all this maddness we call life.
Wittnessed beond all exposure,
unveiled all these lies.
Memories of little things that taunt my hopes and dreams.
Illusions of some secret place that only was a scheme.
Aproached by ghosts of disguised shame,
seduced by tears that rained.
Deceiving tactics sought with vastness,
all intentions to prize pain.
Opened eyes to new morning light,
so bright the truth survives.
Befriended only played and used,
I now see to realize.

Submitted on 2007-01-20 17:01:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I went back and read your poem

I like it although its short it gets to the point. I like how you start it off so i now see the truth, it reminds me off the times where I cant really understand what is going on or I am too stubborn to see what is happening and suddendly for some weird reason I see what is in front of me and it makes sense. Then I ask myself how could you not see it before, when it was staring at me in the face almost in a laughing matter. But in all seriousness this is no laughing matter,

Im sorry to hear that your girlfriend did this to you, but I am even more sorry to think what the aftermath is. It seems like in the battle of the good and evil the corrupt are winning. I think that it is because of these types of experiences that we begin to shut ourselves from the world and from the people around us. I know because I have been there in this position and I really hope that although this was an unpleasant experience you will see this as a form of experimenting sensations, and defining your boundaries. My advice is dont loose hope and dont change who you are because of someone else's actions.

Andrea again, sorry I write too much
| Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  this was pretty cool. Sorry to hear about your girlfriend and what happened. Its always good to think that out of something bad something good will come. I can really relate to your piece although my experience was a bit different my bf was after another girl so i left him but the feelings and the reaction was I think similar to yours. I was very hurt with what he did and I hope that you feel better now.

| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]

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