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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Want To Love Youdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       I miss my ex...and various parts of him...


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    dotsI Don't Want To Love Youdots
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    I don't want to love you,
    No, not tonight
    I just want to feed off your lust
    Until the darkness turns to light.

    I don't want emotions,
    No, I just want your skin
    The weight of your body against mine
    As you bring me to the brink again.

    I don't want to meet your gaze,
    No, I just want to see
    Every single inch of your body
    As you move in and out of me.

    I don't want to talk,
    No, I just want to hear
    The deliciously lustful timbre
    Of you moaning in my ear.

    I don't want to think,
    No, I just want to feel
    The touch of your hands upon my hips
    While on my hands and knees, I kneel.

    I don't need your love,
    No, tonight, that just won't do
    All I need is that sexy grin
    When I say I'm going to fuck you.




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 19:07:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the title is very fitting. it really captures lust, and in a tasteful manner. good work, and your vocabulary is great. the flow is good, it goes a little off in the last stanza but this poem is overall a nice piece.
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      I definitely love this! Awesome job! What is really great about this is that instead of the guy having no emotion, it is the chick this time who only wants a guy for sex. I love it!

    -Angel-
    | Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
      HAH.

    Sorry.
    This made me smile. I'm seventeen, I'm disgusting, but I'll deal with it.

    It's just saying,

    "I want [censored] sex and therefore I think most of the last person I had satisfactory SEX with" YAY.

    Sweet.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome write. It was umm.. very lustful, but I know where you're coming from. It was well written, flowed nicely, worded very nicely, I don't really have anything bad to say. I can sort of relate to this, except, I'd rather have the love along with it, but I'm sure you have your reasons to just want the sin. Keep up the fantastic work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]


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