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    dots Submission Name: beauty: sleepingdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2778/1297/258
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       wouldn't it be wonderful to moult?

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    dotsbeauty: sleepingdots

    feel that?

    that button just
    beneath your thumb
    hidden in that
    fold of flesh?

    ok, press that
    release the catch, ready?
    as easily as shrugging
    meat from bone..
    you're free

    that wasn't
    so awful
    was it?

    now whose
    shadow shall
    I haunt today?

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      Hmm... at my age, moulting just really doesn't appeal... but that would definately be an interesting for humans to do. I'm sure it would drive law enforcement crazy.

    But the things shedding our skin can represent are numerous. The first that springs to mind of course, is that of shedding our past and who we were. I think this is especially applicable to the actual thought of moulting, since at first the flesh is tender and not yet hardened, as we too are when we advance through stages of development.

    I'm sure some day I too will wish to moult my wrinkled exterior... but for now I think I'll keep my finger off the button.

    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      If I did not understand your interests, I might infer a spiritual message in this - like shedding our past, our fears, our illusions in some sort of transcendentalism. However, your symbolism is more direct. And as a near-senior citizen, with my ration of wrinkles, a button to shed them would be nice. Then again, I'd settle for a ripcord - you know, just like a parachute, except you wouldn't have to get on an airplane. These are a bit more comforting than "shrugging meat from a bone". Then again, you haven't seen my cooking.
    Interesting and humorous.
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by fredmelden | [ Reply to This ]

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