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    dots Submission Name: ...ye are but children...dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ~don't rightly know~


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    dots...ye are but children...dots
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    silly little girl
    swimming in a pool
    of stars, awkward lad
    tongue thick with curses
    reserved for heaven

    'you're sparks of light
    feigning wisdom'
    they pungently observe
    'mocking every attribute
    you're given'

    'we are men and women, we know this...'

    'how did you come
    to be a mystery?'

    ...

    'why are you smiling?'




    Submitted on 2007-01-20 21:45:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Bill,

    Since you don't rightly know, do you mind if I take a stab it it?
    I think you have classic theme here of the mystery between Venus and Mars, male and female. Because I'm a woman and men often
    seem in awe of what we might say (on a profound day that is).

    And I will tell you that there are things we know that we cannot explain, we like to give them to others, even if they don't make sense. And seldom do the things women say, make sense to men.

    I'm probably just getting into trouble here. The fact that you let your writing take you where it wants to, that is the point. Sweet and tender, it is, thanks for sharing!

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      such a pretty snapshot. made me think of rapunzel after the escape from the tower. i wrote about her once, but in the end, she strangled the prince to death instead of healing his eyes. guess morbidity is my natural state....
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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