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    dots Submission Name: Phoenix Risingdots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 452
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1451
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 8188



    Description:
       Erebus:spirit of darkness

    Nyx:goddess of the night

    Medusa:the gorgon with snakes growing from
    her head. she was beheaded by Perseus.

    Pegasus:the winged horse that left Medusa's
    body after her death.

    Isis:queen of the gods, goddess of
    fertility.

    Argus:hundred-eyed monster

    Charon:the ferryman who carried the souls
    of the dead over the river styx to Hades.

    Acheron:the underworld river of woe.

    Chronos: personification of time.

    Icarus: fell into the sea and drowned after
    his waxed wings melted when he flew to close
    to the sun.

    Poseidon: god of the sea, brother of zeus.

    sirens:deities that entranced sailors
    to their deaths by their songs.

    Echo: a nymph whose unrequited love for
    Narcissus made her fade away so that
    only her voice remained.

    Phoenix:a bird that consumes itself in fire
    and resurrects from the ashes.

    The Incarnate Son (Virgo - Virgin)
    The Redeemer (Libra - Scales)
    The Sufferer (Scorpio - Scorpion)
    The Conqueror (Sagittarius - Archer)
    The Sacrifice (Capricorn - Goat)
    The Living Water (Aquarius - Water-Bearer)
    The Liberator (Pisces - Fishes)
    The Crowned Lamb (Aries - Ram)
    The Judge (Taurus - Bull)
    The King (Gemini - Twins)
    The Protector (Cancer - Crab)
    The Victor (Leo - Lion)


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    dotsPhoenix Risingdots
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    Forged from the depths
    of the incandescent blue sun
    of the Eternal bosom
    I expel forthright into the abyssal
    nebula of ancient supernovas.

    Amidst their ruins I engage
    Erebus for the darkened souls of men.
    Reigning revelatory thunderbolts of truth
    (precise as Parthian arrows)
    upon his twisted form,
    liberating the captives with a coronation.

    I have devoured Nyxís burnt corduroy existence.
    Her brittle black frame being ground
    between the fiery muse of my serrated teeth.
    Having spit her noxious flesh against
    the outrť canvas of darkness, birthing illuminate
    heralds of the night, my prophecy begins to orbit.

    There, hovering over the circle of the earth,
    the seed bearing virgin rides upon the Lionís back.
    She holds scorpion infused scales,
    while the immaculate child conquers transgressions through
    the self-sacrifice of His incarnation
    (as a ram yielding to the thickets).
    From the Lionís pierced side flows rivers
    of living waters galvanizing life into Pisces.
    Straddling the transparent emerald waves
    of the Divine ancient ocean is a crowned Lamb
    trampling Medusaís head as a fierce bull stampeding, releasing Pegasus to take flight.
    In the distance Gemini Cancers tear out
    Argusí eyes weaving them into peacock tails.

    With the breath of my mouth Isis
    is consumed with endless infertility, cocooned
    in barrenness like a still-morph caterpillar.
    Descending in vehemence I sever Charonís
    ferry with my thrashing
    golden-scarlet plumaged wings
    baptizing him in Acheronís tormented tides.
    Chronos is spilt in two by the double edged sword
    of my first advent and my imminent
    second forthcoming.

    With inexorable passion I heed
    the cry of the f
                             a
                                  l
                                       l
                                  i
                             n
                        g
                        Icarus desperately treading water,
    fused within Poseidonís bowels by the brazen
    wax of his disobedience.
    Tenderly I call to him as a Father
    to a wayward son. Gripping his hand I pull him
    from the clammy claws of the Sirens, there,
    together, with our arms entwined
    we walk upon the topaz mid-night sea.
    Clothe with my majesty he once again
    mounts up with eagleís wings and soars
    into the sunrise of the merciful blue heavens.
    In the valley of bones
    my whispers of love rescue Echoís fading
    voice from unrequited affection.
    Encompassed by my heart she finds
    her identity within the truth of who I am.

    Triumphantly I form my nest
    with myrrh doused cinnamon sticks
    upon the citadel of the skull.
    With a roar of glory I burst from
    the flames loudly proclaiming,


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      oh yes
    perfect
    lol this is exactly what you would write if there some mythical dieties thrown in there
    excellent word choice and imagery and i like the neat little trick of making the letters rise and fall
    the poem doesn't need that to enhance by any means but yet it does and its not overdone
    good peice def a fav too
    | Posted on 2007-01-28 00:00:00 | by digitalflower | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work john-paul, you seem to be sky writing to us about intense feelings about Christ. And well you should in your line of work. The cleaning up of the sky does give us some clarity and as the phoenix rises, we have the feel for new life beginning. And it can and does in all ways from the perspective of each individual
    as they progress on their spiritual path.

    The only thing I would suggestion I would make is to reduce the amount of "ing" endings, true it's easy to maintain present tense by using these, but the time we take to rethink a line makes then feel stronger.

    Icarus desperately treading water, (treads)
    fused within Poseidonís bowels by the brazen
    wax of his disobedience.
    Tenderly I call to him as a Father
    to a wayward son. Gripping his hand I pull him
    from the clammy claws of the Sirens, there,
    together, with our arms entwined
    we walk upon the topaz mid-night sea.
    Clothing him with my majesty he once again
    mounts up with eagleís wings and flyís
    into the sunrise of the merciful blue heavens.
    In the valley of bones
    my whispers of love rescue Echoís fading
    voice from unrequited affection.
    Encompassed by my heart she finds
    her identity within the truth of who I am.

    Icarus desperately treads water...

    I grip his hand from the clammy...

    Clothed in my majesty once again...

    And there might be others in the first strophe too. Excellent work, your imagination is running wild in the sky. I wonder if Superman knows what you're up to?

    Nan
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      "fly's" to flies - perhaps?

    Cool... an interesting and rather bold use of first person considering Who and What we're dealing with. "Lone Star Over Murky Waters" had a similar feel in that respect, I found myself wondering about the extent of your (and by extension our own) personal participation.

    Out with the old, in with the new as a theme? The Holy Bible does not say there are no other Gods, only that we shall have no other Gods before HIM. That can be extrapolated to indicate that from our perspective there are in fact others. Perhaps you have named some here from what names we can gather from "mythology". What's in a name?

    If that be the case, we must always be careful how we use and depict such powers that be. As according to scripture:

    Jud 1:8 Likewise also these [filthy] dreamers defile the flesh, despise dominion, and speak evil of dignities.

    Jud 1:9 Yet Michael the archangel, when contending with the devil he disputed about the body of Moses, durst not bring against him a railing accusation, but said, The Lord rebuke thee.

    That is to say, we don't really know to what degree the ancients might have referred to actual "dignities" in what we term mythology, and so it pays to stay at least as careful as Michael. As with man's law, ignorance may not provide a good excuse. Just a thought.

    A daily dose of spiritual stimulation, thanks.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      babes... you really have the depth and patience to put something like this together. i don't think that anyone can posses an imagination like this. the way that your mind can interpret and piece something together like this is really unbelievable...

    and the common most valuable thread woven in your work is the ever victorious and invincible Christ- Jesus our Savior!

    i love how you portray Him, how you magnify the glory and reality of His resurrection.

    i am really proud of the time you took to research this and allegorize it the way that you did.

    your work is so far above me, my love- your mind confounds me- your intellect astounds me...

    your dulcinea (as bill refers)
    Cynthia
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Sacred Sindy | [ Reply to This ]
      There, hovering over the circle of the earth,
    the seed bearing virgin rides upon the Lionís back.
    She is holding scorpion infused scales,
    while the immaculate child conquers transgressions through
    the self-sacrifice of His incarnation
    (as a ram yielding to the thickets).
    From the Lionís pierced side flows rivers
    of living waters galvanizing life into Pisces.
    Straddling the transparent emerald waves
    of the Divine ancient ocean is a crowned Lamb
    trampling Medusaís head as a fierce bull stampeding, releasing Pegasus to take flight.
    In the distance Gemini Cancers tear out
    Argusí eyes weaving them into peacock tails.



    Well. J.P., was it really your intent to use Pegasus as a metaphor for spiritual rebirth/ deliverance from sin? If so, that was a very nice twist on a mythological theme. The weaving of Argus's eyes into peacock tails is also an interesting metaphor for the 'all-seeing' misery of guilt to become beauty by means of redemptive power. You definitely have been inspired of late. Must be the good Dulcinea.

    Take care, John Paul.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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