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    dots Submission Name: Wage of a Battlefrenzydots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsWage of a Battlefrenzydots
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    I have seen it, oh penance, walking the thrones of thievery
    Pale in the moonshard where it slithered
    Ages of dreaming and never to lay eyes on the name of madness
    Screaming a vulture of prey and a neverending hunger
    As though a war itself had never been enough for a thirst as such
    To melt on a tongue and spread through the world when all the eyes were shut
    Forsaken a life, forsaken to sleep would all the kings lay a surrender
    When the flags would fall and the forts would crash
    A heart to bestill on the faces of sorrow and liquid a frenzy
    Narrow a path to run and to hide never indulging a sanctimony
    My life to abandon in the midst of this scrimage
    Should a memory haunt and drain me forever
    Miles and days to grant me the ignorance rather then stay there and wither
    Possessive a toll to leech me of heartbeats
    All in the name of victory jaded and thousands of souls to sunder, devour
    Still there…in my veins where the cries continue…it rages and claims on it's freedom
    Is there an hour longer I can last no history can tell, nor can I utter a plead
    Just there in the light it stands like apocalypse
    Waiting to feed on my body when it falls





    Submitted on 2007-01-21 08:48:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wonderful! Great all the way through!
    Where did you get the inspiration?
    Excellent work. I will return to see your other poems too.
    parul.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      War poem war poem war poem war poem! *gleeful grin*
    Unfortunately "leech" is the correct spelling, you wrote "leach" :O
    Wonderfully presented, the picture is most relevant, (I like the beams of light going through the soldier) and the imagery is of course of the top quality only Porcelaine can offer.

    All in the name of victory jaded and thousands of souls to sunder, devour

    True genius, true genius, another perfect piece from my flawless friend.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poetry has a beautiful flow and orginazition! If I read your meaning right, this is on the toil and tragedy of war! You write with eloquence and confidence, as well as intensity and passion! Nice work, dear Porcelaine!
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      i love that you have the perfect picture with every piece of literature you write. this was amazing. hopefully i can start witing up to your level

    - kase
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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