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    dots Submission Name: confustiondots
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    Author: shayla8911
    ASL Info:    19/f/sd
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 78/85/43
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 785
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 779



    Description:
       just some of my confusion of growing and changing in life even if there are parts of you you would rather not have change; it's as if you have no control over it...


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    dotsconfustiondots
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    I feel myself falling,
    the blood echos.
    It's so hard to continue on,
    continuing to be a pawn,
    in this game.
    It's so hard to feel my thoughts,
    to see my dreams.
    So hard to continue on
    as if I've never changed and
    I'm the same.

    Faking life,
    Faking death...
    Fucking life,
    Nothing's left.
    Turn to dust and blow me away.

    I feel the tables turning,
    I feel the fear inside.
    I hear the lions growling.
    I feel the need to hide.
    It's so hard to continue.
    It's so hard to stay in place,
    When the world keeps moving.
    It's so easy to change and
    impossible to stay the same.




    Submitted on 2007-01-21 12:40:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was pretty good, the flow there intill you got to this part

    "Faking life,
    Faking death...
    [censored]ing life,
    Nothing's left.
    Turn to dust and blow me away."

    the last part in the last line though it off other than that the piece was written pretty good

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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