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    dots Submission Name: The Maskdots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 617
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 757



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       Past love, current love, blahblahblah. I think it turned out alright, what do you think?


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    dotsThe Maskdots
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    Whisper in the darkness
    The things you want from me
    Live in happiness if only for a moment
    I'll be waiting here forever
    If thats what it takes

    Long lost memories whipser slowly
    to me

    Make a wish in today
    To go back to those days...
    Believing you were happy
    Deceived that you were loved
    All the while...

    Begging for the truth to come
    To you

    I've been hiding behind her for so long
    She has become what i am
    My mask is now morphing into my soul
    I try to come to the surface to touch your face
    Yet i can't find the light....

    Drowning slowly in the waters
    In her....




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      i agree with jessy, you are gifted in many ways, and the one apparent here is your ability to recognize the 'mask' forcibly worn by us all. search and never settle for something/someone doesn’t have what you need, love, attention that sort of thing. keep it up !
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem finds me in a interesting point, I am in love is [censored] and romantance is a fable stage in life. So I guess It makes me think that we spend so much energy trying to make things be something. one day this will all change I guess. But keep fighting or find something new. Do something to find yourself. Keep writing it down


    Jessy rae
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Artist4rent | [ Reply to This ]


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