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    dots Submission Name: Bush's Pawnsdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 865



    Description:
       this is a rough draft, Yeah this against are President, but when having so many friends having dads moms and other parts of family or even friends over there and Bush delaying the come back of the soldiers. It's something i need to write. This is more a rant, so any kind of comment would help. don't care if it bad or good comment.
    thank you


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    dotsBush's Pawnsdots
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    (opening)
    troops gone and we still at war
    But we as the average American don't know really what for.
    Cause are fine President could give a damn about our ass
    So I don't wanna hear shit that he has to say
    Troops gone and dying and we still at war
    like I said,
    Nobody even really knows what for.

    Eyes so sore,
    Hearts ache with relentless pain
    What this war? what are we to gain.

    Blood stains not on the U.S. soldier uniform
    But on the hands of are fine president.

    He wasn’t to hesitant
    To send the troops over seas,
    Only if he turned back to hendacy
    We could really tell that he is really a she.

    Answer this Mr.President
    How can we fight a war
    When We got are own problem
    on your soil?




    Submitted on 2007-01-21 15:11:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cause are fine President (our) are fine president (our)
    Only if he turned back to hendacy
    We could really tell that he is really a she.
    what do you mean???
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      cool poem. our presidant is a silly silly monkey. i would like to see him go to war with our souldies ...
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      this is cool man, i can feel yr american heart bleeding for this non war, i mean a war has two sides i cant clearly define the enemy, but yo, though Bush is the sucker puppet to blame there IS a darker puppeteer pulling strings, He does want whats best for America, or so i think, but he just cant see the bull shyt underneath,


    thanks for your comment and ad man, makes it worth my energy to know awareness is spredding!
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      nice, very political, catches the mood of the momment,the lyrics are good, i like them, the rhyming was a bit off at times but like you said it is a rant, still liked it though, take care
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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