Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Backed by the Red White and Bluedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1088
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1566



    Description:
       I cant wait until we have a different president!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBacked by the Red White and Bluedots
    -------------------------------------------


    We stand up on our pedestal,
    watching the world go by.
    Waging wars that echo through eternity,
    defining them all with a simple lie.
    You tell yourself itís for the greater good
    and you almost believe itís true.
    You canít sell me your lies
    I wonít buy them,
    I donít believe in you.
    I hear the cries of humanity
    begging to stop this insanity.
    I see the glimmer in your eyes,
    as another bomb fly through the skies.
    There is a sickness in this power we gave,
    there is an evil in the power you crave,
    there is a rift in this country of the brave.
    A giant whole, digging our grave.
    Your voice rings out with authority
    truth the minority,
    a little man full of insecurities
    feeding on the strong.
    A devil running heaven
    when itís in hell that he belongs.
    This horror movie is playing itself out,
    we watch the bodies,
    we count the dead,
    knowing what it was all about.
    A price has been placed
    on the head of man kind.
    An evil has erased all the ties that bind.
    Everyone sees the evil
    with no way to make it right.
    Everyone is sick of wars
    but still we fight.
    We march our march
    with a cadence ringing out true.
    We carry our torch
    while the blood stains
    the hands of the brave,
    the souls of the true.
    Singing our song of destruction
    backed by the red white and blue.





    Submitted on 2007-01-21 16:21:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      this was great, im adding it to my favs. you give me too much credit, this poem beats the hell out of my latest one. this line really stood out, i liked it the most "A devil running heaven". thats a really good line. good job amanda!

    - kase
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      The was really good, i jsut got down writng something about bush and the war called "Bush's Pawns" u should check it out. the flow was there from start to end. i can't see nothing worng wit this peice.

    well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work.

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      it is really good, well written i liked how you changed the rhyming pattern, very affective, and it didn,t stop the flow, good work catches the mood of the momment.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      I normally dont like political stuff{makes me mad the world} but i loved this, Its not only well written but unlike alot of political things I've read it doesn't go to far, I liked it good job.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    132739

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Sunt Mala Quae Libas written by MyPeriodical
    Dirge of Nostalgia written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the Epilogue written by HisNameIsNoMore
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Incubus written by monad
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Watch them Die written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Search written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    ME written by jjd
    Legends written by poetotoe
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    The Last to Walk the Earth written by HisNameIsNoMore
    By the bar written by expiring_touch
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Tides of Man written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Commencement written by Ramneet
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Can't let my demons go written by faideddarkness
    Still written by HisNameIsNoMore
    When Crows Tick on Windows written by metallichick786
    Lunch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry