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Backed by the Red White and Blue

Author: Amanda Lynn
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I cant wait until we have a different president!

Backed by the Red White and Blue

We stand up on our pedestal,
watching the world go by.
Waging wars that echo through eternity,
defining them all with a simple lie.
You tell yourself it’s for the greater good
and you almost believe it’s true.
You can’t sell me your lies
I won’t buy them,
I don’t believe in you.
I hear the cries of humanity
begging to stop this insanity.
I see the glimmer in your eyes,
as another bomb fly through the skies.
There is a sickness in this power we gave,
there is an evil in the power you crave,
there is a rift in this country of the brave.
A giant whole, digging our grave.
Your voice rings out with authority
truth the minority,
a little man full of insecurities
feeding on the strong.
A devil running heaven
when it’s in hell that he belongs.
This horror movie is playing itself out,
we watch the bodies,
we count the dead,
knowing what it was all about.
A price has been placed
on the head of man kind.
An evil has erased all the ties that bind.
Everyone sees the evil
with no way to make it right.
Everyone is sick of wars
but still we fight.
We march our march
with a cadence ringing out true.
We carry our torch
while the blood stains
the hands of the brave,
the souls of the true.
Singing our song of destruction
backed by the red white and blue.

Submitted on 2007-01-21 16:21:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was great, im adding it to my favs. you give me too much credit, this poem beats the hell out of my latest one. this line really stood out, i liked it the most "A devil running heaven". thats a really good line. good job amanda!

- kase
| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
  The was really good, i jsut got down writng something about bush and the war called "Bush's Pawns" u should check it out. the flow was there from start to end. i can't see nothing worng wit this peice.

well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work.

| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  it is really good, well written i liked how you changed the rhyming pattern, very affective, and it didn,t stop the flow, good work catches the mood of the momment.
| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
  I normally dont like political stuff{makes me mad the world} but i loved this, Its not only well written but unlike alot of political things I've read it doesn't go to far, I liked it good job.
| Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]

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