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    dots Submission Name: Backed by the Red White and Bluedots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 332/193/56
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I cant wait until we have a different president!


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    dotsBacked by the Red White and Bluedots
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    We stand up on our pedestal,
    watching the world go by.
    Waging wars that echo through eternity,
    defining them all with a simple lie.
    You tell yourself itís for the greater good
    and you almost believe itís true.
    You canít sell me your lies
    I wonít buy them,
    I donít believe in you.
    I hear the cries of humanity
    begging to stop this insanity.
    I see the glimmer in your eyes,
    as another bomb fly through the skies.
    There is a sickness in this power we gave,
    there is an evil in the power you crave,
    there is a rift in this country of the brave.
    A giant whole, digging our grave.
    Your voice rings out with authority
    truth the minority,
    a little man full of insecurities
    feeding on the strong.
    A devil running heaven
    when itís in hell that he belongs.
    This horror movie is playing itself out,
    we watch the bodies,
    we count the dead,
    knowing what it was all about.
    A price has been placed
    on the head of man kind.
    An evil has erased all the ties that bind.
    Everyone sees the evil
    with no way to make it right.
    Everyone is sick of wars
    but still we fight.
    We march our march
    with a cadence ringing out true.
    We carry our torch
    while the blood stains
    the hands of the brave,
    the souls of the true.
    Singing our song of destruction
    backed by the red white and blue.





    Submitted on 2007-01-21 16:21:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was great, im adding it to my favs. you give me too much credit, this poem beats the hell out of my latest one. this line really stood out, i liked it the most "A devil running heaven". thats a really good line. good job amanda!

    - kase
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      The was really good, i jsut got down writng something about bush and the war called "Bush's Pawns" u should check it out. the flow was there from start to end. i can't see nothing worng wit this peice.

    well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work.

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      it is really good, well written i liked how you changed the rhyming pattern, very affective, and it didn,t stop the flow, good work catches the mood of the momment.
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      I normally dont like political stuff{makes me mad the world} but i loved this, Its not only well written but unlike alot of political things I've read it doesn't go to far, I liked it good job.
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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