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    dots Submission Name: Never Really Minedots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 767
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 990



    Description:
       A poem about a man that I love and never had...


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    dotsNever Really Minedots
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    Just go away
    Leave me alone
    You never want to stay
    So do what you want
    Just run
    Like you always do
    I know you donít love me
    Somehow I always knew
    I gave you my heart
    My body too
    Just a tool
    For you to pick up and use
    Now I am left alone
    With a hole for a heart
    As soon as I trusted you
    You came and tore me apart
    So just leave
    I donít want to love you anymore
    I was nothing to you
    I gave you everything and so much more
    I canít take the pain
    The nights staying up
    All put to vain
    Just wanted you to care
    Knowing youíd never
    Truly be there
    Just leave! Get the fuck out!
    I am tired of trying
    Left with nothing but worries and doubts
    Inside Iím slowly dying
    Please go now
    Before I change my mind
    This is what I get for loving a man
    That was never really mine....




    Submitted on 2007-01-21 16:43:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is good. I know it is hard to go through pain and have a life inside you that is a reminder of him. ANd it will get better. I promise you this. I will seal that deal with one loving kiss. SO plzz comet my poems. I F.L.Y!!

    And everyday the sun rise
    Everyday the moon lowers
    Time is a tool we use
    To heal our selfs
    It takes many moons and many suns
    To help feel above
    But remember this
    I'll aways be here
    Never to leave
    So trust me
    ANd believe


    Kelsey ( I Love you, i am me)
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]
      I know... 100%... how you feel. I hope you arent in the same situation... My guy was and still is my neighbor. He still comes over... and I have to hide the fact that I still want him even though I dont want to want him.
    If you need someone to talk to, I'm always here.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      i kno how u feel i've been there before, but when we fall we always get back up again remember that.

    Brian
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...*tear*...wtf...this really got to me and i dont know why cuz i've never had a relationship...wow..Niiice
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by 2xhatedxsoulx2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa quite a heartfelt poem there . But you could try and work on the flow and the rythm a bit more.. but overall a good write
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]


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