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    dots Submission Name: Walk your Own Waydots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWalk your Own Waydots
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    I get up in the mornin’
    Not ready for this day…

    I try too hard to
    Get my hair straight.
    Not thinking about those,
    Who try so hard to make their own...
    Curl.

    Watching the news…
    Throws me off.
    Sure there are murders, robbers, sex offenders-
    And unheard of cops-
    Always.

    I don’t appreciate,
    The small stuff, and sometimes...
    I am unaware of the gifts that are left in the rain.
    I can’t understand everyone, or everything.
    So I'm self-centered…

    Sure, I’m worried,
    About places and things, but mostly...
    I can only see out of my own two eyes!
    And yet, I’m afraid to walk my own way.




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      Very easy to relate to as the others have said before. What made it best is the fact you used everyday things like fixing your hair and watching T.V. It was good.
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      You can miss out on gifts being self centered,just my outlook.We walk our own way and bump into others sometimes.I love the rain but not enough to walk in it coldly the way I use to.This is the way I relate to the piece. 4.5stars from honesty of course.

    You know whom it's from by now.
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this and I'm sure lots of people feel the same way you do? I know I do. thanks for sharring.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Adding things in this that a lot of people can relate to (not ready for the new day, straightening your hair, watching the news, etc.) really helps the reader relate and understand. I don't know...it just...brings up emotions that bond with yours...hard to explain :x

    I really enjoyed this though. The message you're giving is powerful...one that I think a lot of people struggle with. Simple things are easy to overlook...and there are also things that aren't simple at all, that are even easier to overlook.

    Your work makes me think...I like that :]

    -miaz k.
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Isolde xx | [ Reply to This ]
      A highly introspective piece .... sometimes introspection can go TOO far and this poem suggests that very succintly and well ... fine, fine images which draw the reader in comfortably ... works well ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm..I really really like it. I love the idea of everyone trying to act as one..and trying not to worry or shrugging off the things that can mess up their whole lives. Not even bothering to think about everything that they have that people might be jealous of, but would rather think about what everyone else has and what they're jealous of. That we don't want to be judged in this world, but we judge everyone else, and ourselves the most. I love it Kelsea. Very awesome and I love the flow. I don't know..it just..works I don't think theres anything to critique on it..because its just..I don't know xD perfect. My favourite part would be..

    I try too hard to
    Get my hair straight
    Not thinking about those
    Who try so hard to make their’s
    Curl.

    probably because i straighten my hair.. =P Love you <3
    | Posted on 2007-01-21 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]


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