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    dots Submission Name: Love It When You Calldots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 461
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1900



    Description:
       Thinking about how much a phone call from a friend can mean sometimes...


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    dotsLove It When You Calldots
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    Another lonely night
    Spent staring at the screen
    Of the computer or the t.v.
    And all the traffic in between
    Another wasted day
    Where time passes too slow
    And there's no one here to talk to
    And no other place to go.
    Another pointless moment
    Spent wondering what to do
    And then the phone begins to ring
    And the screen says it's you

    I love it when you call
    It always makes me smile
    And it's never very much,
    But we'll chat for a while
    I love it when you call
    Because it's me you're calling for
    You're one of my very best friends
    And I couldn't ask for more
    I love it when you call
    Though there's never much to say
    It just helps to know you're thinking of me
    And it never fails to brighten the day.

    I'll talk about whatever
    Anything that comes to mind
    And you'll patiently sit and listen
    A gesture far beyond kind
    It's amazing that we can even be close
    When we walk very different paths
    But sometimes the most unlikely of friendships
    Are the ones that are built to last
    So before the call is ended
    There's only one thing left to do
    You tell me that you love me
    And I say I love you too

    Cause I love it when you call
    And that it is, in fact, your choice
    I love the way you say, "Hey, you!"
    And the smile that's in your voice
    I love it when you call
    Always at the perfect time
    When the silence is unbearable
    Or the slope too hard to climb
    It's crazy that such a little thing
    Could make a difference at all
    But the truth of the matter is,
    I love it when you call.




    Submitted on 2007-01-21 21:40:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another superbly concieved and written piece...it would break a heart of stone. Wonderful described and narrated! I loved it! bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my, you know, I didn't want to read this at first because I thought it would end up as those mushy ones, but you completely changed everything halfway through, even I depend very much on phone calls from my best friend, he's being conscripted soon, so I won't be able to see him as often or even talk to him.
    Thank you so much for the lovely, lovely write.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really great, I used to hate the lovey-dovey type poems but lately it's all I can get into.

    "And all the traffic in between"

    I'm not quite sure what that's supposed to mean. Oo

    Some people aren't fans of repetition, but I think you pulled it off quite nicely. The rhythm flows well and is very consistent. I love it
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by rawrpanda | [ Reply to This ]


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