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    dots Submission Name: We Live To Diedots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       ... Sigh.. we live to die. that should say it all

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    dotsWe Live To Diedots

    We are born
    To live.
    We are born
    To make something out of this life.
    Out of what has been given to us.
    Yet I have to question
    What is the point of out exstance?
    When in the end the majority of us will not matter?
    We will leave this earth just for our hard times to be forgotten.
    We are granted the privilege to live
    To have lungs full of oxygen
    And what we do with this life
    Itís up to us
    So may I ask... what do we do when
    Such a greatfull gift I have described to you
    Is taken away?
    By a Cancer
    By Violence
    By Old Age
    What shall my love ones do?
    This wonderful gift "life"
    Itís now when the oxygen is nonexistent in my grandmother's lungs...
    For her time as come
    There are no more good times..
    Bad times..
    Her time has came and went
    Nevertheless.... she remains in my hart!

    RIP: Oct 1924-Jan 2007

    Submitted on 2007-01-21 23:54:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked what you were saying. i noticed one typo, but other than that it was good. you could word it differently in some places to make it flow better but it was good anyway

    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the idea of it, but this was very straight forward and didn't flow very well. I like what you're saying, but how you said it could use some revisiting.
    | Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]

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