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    dots Submission Name: willdots
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    Author: painfullyme
    ASL Info:    23/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 335/456/72
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Bytes: 974



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    the sky above is shining bright
    but that won't help me through the night
    i'd like to stand and try to fight
    but, God knows, i can't do anything right

    so that leaves me in a hell
    with nothing more to give
    a place i know too well
    ravages my will to live

    pieces of my soul are the price to pay
    for living a lie day after day
    faking it like i wasn't just in the way
    pretending i had something important to say

    so that leaves me in a hell
    with nothing more to give
    a place i know too well
    ravages my will to live

    now i've tried to see
    a better way to be
    no matter what i do
    one thing still rings true

    i've been lost inside a hell
    never had too much to give
    it's a place i know too well
    slowly draining
    the will
    to live
    *




    Submitted on 2004-06-04 19:32:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an excelent poem, but sound more like lyrics to me. After i read the words i had to make a rythym to sing it to. The second go i sang your poem as if it were a song, and it raised long dead memories, and brought tears. I don't know what that means to you, but from someone as souless and empty as myself it was a great read!
    | Posted on 2004-06-04 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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