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    dots Submission Name: Some Kids Have It Worse Than Youdots
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    Author: danajoanne
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       I had a bad night which caused me to evaluate my life, which was more pathetic than I thought. Hence I wrote this to myself.


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    dotsSome Kids Have It Worse Than Youdots
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    Little girl, why so blue
    Some kids have it worse than you
    Bruises on their bodies
    Mommies and daddies being naughty
    What do you have, a yucky feeling?
    Theres kids thrown against the celing
    Don't you care? Don't you see?
    How bad abuse can be?
    Depression doesn't matter
    When their bodies lay shattered
    Could you compare?
    To pulled out hair?
    Or incest pregnancies?
    Drug and alcohol dependency?
    Kids are living every day
    Worse than you I say
    Don't say a word
    When your little problems are so absurd.




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      ah!!! yes!!! im favoriting this!!! i do the same thing!!! i pity myself, realize my life isnt that bad, and still pity myself!!! what the hell is up with that!?!?! sorry to geek out on you, but Jesus Christ, WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH PEOPLE NOWADAYS!?!!? can i stick this to my locker?

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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