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Acid


Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
Total Views: 747
Average Vote:    4.0000
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i really dont know where this one came from. i just wrote it recently, two nights ago if im correct. -muses-
enjoy the read! - Phoenix


Acid



You kill me slowly
Softly murder me
Throw our love up in flames
Effectively hide whatever little shame
You might be human enough to feel.
Scald me with your painful touch
I'll love it just the same.
Reach out your hand and hold me tight
As you eat my skin away.
Lean in slowly for the final blow
Lean in for the kill.
Your acid kiss
Will burn my lips
For you, my love
Are my kryptonite.




Submitted on 2007-01-22 15:24:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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