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Block You Out


Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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written for an assignment last year for English III. aimed towards parents, teachers, and annoying people who think they are your friend. i like this one, and not just because it got me a good grade. ^_^
hope you enjoy. - Phoenix


Block You Out



I hear your voice
But I'm not tuning you in
Sounds so weak, sounds so thin
Stop.
Just stop.
Your lips are moving
But nothing flows out
Somewhere there's an echo,
I'm screaming now
Your lips are still moving
I'm still blocking out your voice
I'm taking shelter in my mind
To ignore you is my choice.




Submitted on 2007-01-22 16:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was prety good, short but only thing i really didn't get the feeling you put engough emtoins into it. the flow was really choppy but you still got you point across. I loved the last line "To ignore you is my choice." It is a big statment.

well hope to hear from ya and keep writng

Max
Aka
Lil'Mix
| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  short and to the point. sweetness...this is very easy to relate to, and i'm sure, not just for me...everyone has those annoying people in their lives...well, me, i'm usually the annoying one everyone wants to shut out lol but hey, it happens...
| Posted on 2007-01-22 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]


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