the only thing that I liked in this was the line where being with the dead will make me feel alive, the rest was so off the wall and retarded it wasn't even funny. Does this have any meaning to it? what the hell were you trying to say? Is there a point to this? I'll tell you what good poetry is:
Good poetry is something that makes you feel deep emotions that you keep buried so FuCkIn deep that nothing would ever let them resurface. then you read a solid piece of poetry and it makes you reel with emotion.
Good poetry makes you laugh out loud, good poetry makes you think about the existence of man and nature and the opposite parrallels of the human mind and all it's power. thats what it is...and i'm very sorry...but if you can start a poem off with a line that someone killed himself and then turn it into a piece of crap, cause recently I had a friend kill himself, if you would have kept going with this, it would have been fine.