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Desecration


Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Angst
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i wrote it the same night i finished Crush, which i will post later on.
for all of the people that i have known and been friends with throughout my life that have been and are still being physically abused... guys, with all of my heart, this is for you. <333
please take the time to read this. - Phoenix


Desecration



Tie me up and call me names
Beat me up, you're all the same
Crucify my every want
Until I am numb and cannot protest.
You never stop hitting me
Not even as I bleed.
Desecrate my inner sanctuary
It was never sacred to you.
Punch me, just because I bleed
Block out every thought and need
As I swallow
Blow after blow
They all begin to melt away
Into painless pressure.
And I hear you say
Those words
Those three short words
That I had thought you so incapable of.
You say them in a voice
That's so sweet and kind
Is it real or in my mind?
Snap back to reality
You're still hitting me
And as I slip away
I hear my soul say
Goodbye




Submitted on 2007-01-22 20:27:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Awesome! Not only are the emotions deep and saddening, and I feel for you a ton. There is also wonderful description and things are put perfectly.
Never let anyone do this to you. You and wonderful, and there is no excuse for abuse.

Keep writing with the fire of the resurgent Phoenix!


~~Mykquillion
| Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]


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