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    dots Submission Name: Just wanted to Knowdots
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    Author: nicelyJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999/519/73
    Words: 103
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       I was just thinking of Spinach, and went on a tangent. Maybe someone old will catch my allusions :)


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    dotsJust wanted to Knowdots
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    Is it safe to eat spinach again?
    because I've been
    Malnourished.
    Needing something leafy
    and green.

    I am what I am,
    but that's not all that I've been,
    and hopefully
    not all that i'll be
    but who will free me
    from this ...

    because lately
    all that i've consumed are woes
    (at the occasional pity party)
    and I've lacked the brute strenth to
    defeat my life's Blutoes

    and I long for a healthy diet of Olive Oil,
    but i've been feeling a little Wimpy
    as though my forearms
    aren't quite big enough
    and I can't get a grip.




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 02:35:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I Yam what I yam!" I like interesting pieces inspired by something that usually isn't considered poetic. From Ergolgo's comment I sense there is a between-the-two-of-you joke but I enjoyed it anyhoo!

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    | Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      That's all I can stands cause I can't stands no more! I caught your drift my man.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good, my only think about it

    from this ...


    felt like it was a bit out of place or forced, other than that great, I wasn't too sure on the popeye reference, although it was obviously my first impression, as perhaps I am a bit too young for him, although I did watch him growing up.

    Other than the one critique, good sincere heart felt piece.
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really fantastic
    I have always had a fascination with the Popeye cartoons and you really put my whole obsession into perspective
    Again you did a brilliant job on this
    I am easily making this a favorite
    GREAT WORK!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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