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Just wanted to Know

Author: nicelyJ
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I was just thinking of Spinach, and went on a tangent. Maybe someone old will catch my allusions :)

Just wanted to Know

Is it safe to eat spinach again?
because I've been
Needing something leafy
and green.

I am what I am,
but that's not all that I've been,
and hopefully
not all that i'll be
but who will free me
from this ...

because lately
all that i've consumed are woes
(at the occasional pity party)
and I've lacked the brute strenth to
defeat my life's Blutoes

and I long for a healthy diet of Olive Oil,
but i've been feeling a little Wimpy
as though my forearms
aren't quite big enough
and I can't get a grip.

Submitted on 2007-01-23 02:35:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "I Yam what I yam!" I like interesting pieces inspired by something that usually isn't considered poetic. From Ergolgo's comment I sense there is a between-the-two-of-you joke but I enjoyed it anyhoo!

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| Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  That's all I can stands cause I can't stands no more! I caught your drift my man.
| Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really good, my only think about it

from this ...

felt like it was a bit out of place or forced, other than that great, I wasn't too sure on the popeye reference, although it was obviously my first impression, as perhaps I am a bit too young for him, although I did watch him growing up.

Other than the one critique, good sincere heart felt piece.
| Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really fantastic
I have always had a fascination with the Popeye cartoons and you really put my whole obsession into perspective
Again you did a brilliant job on this
I am easily making this a favorite
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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