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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 680
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1424



    Description:
       This is also a true story like Formal is. The ending is also made up. The poem is explains itself. My best-guy-friend were fighting but now we aren't.


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    dotsGoodbyedots
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    We used to be the best of friends.
    We always laughed & played.
    We were like two peas in a pod,
    As some would say.

    Some said we should be more.
    That we would look cute together.
    So we gave it a shot
    & we became like two birds of a feather.

    Then things fell apart.
    I couldn't think of you as more than a brother.
    So we stayed friends
    & didn't go any further.

    Then you got with your ex
    & she didn't like me so well.
    So further away you dropped me
    As I fell & fell.

    Why won't you save me?
    You won't even look at me anymore.
    When she's around
    In my face is where you shut the door.

    You treat me like trash
    & I feel like it.
    But when I tell you that
    You don't care a bit.

    It hurts so bad
    Deep inside.
    I'm thinking about
    Saying goodbye.

    On a cold rainy day
    When nothing turned out right.
    I got so depressed
    I went out into the night.

    My car went off the road
    & ran into a tree.
    You finally opened your eyes.
    It took that for you to see.

    My funeral's today
    & you start to cry.
    This is my way
    Of saying goodbye.




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 09:37:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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