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Submission Name:
Goodbye
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Author:
Emo Angel
ASL Info:
15/f/Texas
Elite Ratio:
3.06 - 17/26/24
Words:
222
Class/Type:
Poetry/Friendship
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This is also a true story like Formal is. The ending is also made up. The poem is explains itself. My best-guy-friend were fighting but now we aren't.
Goodbye
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We used to be the best of friends.
We always laughed & played.
We were like two peas in a pod,
As some would say.
Some said we should be more.
That we would look cute together.
So we gave it a shot
& we became like two birds of a feather.
Then things fell apart.
I couldn't think of you as more than a brother.
So we stayed friends
& didn't go any further.
Then you got with your ex
& she didn't like me so well.
So further away you dropped me
As I fell & fell.
Why won't you save me?
You won't even look at me anymore.
When she's around
In my face is where you shut the door.
You treat me like trash
& I feel like it.
But when I tell you that
You don't care a bit.
It hurts so bad
Deep inside.
I'm thinking about
Saying goodbye.
On a cold rainy day
When nothing turned out right.
I got so depressed
I went out into the night.
My car went off the road
& ran into a tree.
You finally opened your eyes.
It took that for you to see.
My funeral's today
& you start to cry.
This is my way
Of saying goodbye.
Submitted on 2007-01-23 09:37:38
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