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    dots Submission Name: The Way I Dodots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 701
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem for my brother awhile back hope you all like it!..I'll be submitting more when i have time


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    dotsThe Way I Dodots
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    To show my love for you
    Is a shame
    Loving you is like a game...get played along the way
    The sound of your voice makes my day
    But my longing to see you drives me insane
    What to do when you found your way
    To my brain
    Sit and cry at the sound of your name
    Better yet walk around with a bat in hand
    To show I'm mad...so watch your head
    Explain the unknown only to you
    I would do
    With you comes along my faith
    A friend that could never be replaced
    Dreams only you know
    All you have to do is look in my eyes
    Suprised to see loneliness deep inside
    What a shame
    I miss you everyday
    Pray you stay out of harms way
    But what are sisters for
    Other then to love you the way I do




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 15:09:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I dig your poem, I like how you go back and forth between your emotions. So often when we write we focus on one specific feeling and endulge. I like the fact that you go above that and bring lots of different elements in. If you get a chance, check out some of my writings, take care, keep writing....
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by StevenJay | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really cute, and it's good that you have such a strong bond with your brother, not many siblings have that :-)
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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