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Submission Name: Don't Ask, Just Wait dots

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Author:	just an angel
ASL Info:	17/F/FL
Elite Ratio:	3.89 - 95/109/59
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	700
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Don't Ask, Just Wait dots

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I asked for a gift
My heart cannot take
I begged for a blessing
Meant for a good sake

Yet this gift is a curse
One I could foretell
Would be good for sometime
But end in a bitter farewell

What we all would do
For a day of pure bliss
One that's so quickly gone
Spent the rest of time to miss

Is it all worth it?
All risks and dangers?
Should we risk our hearts
To complete strangers?

I'd rather not ask
I'll just wait for it to arrive
The time when good fortune will show
Beating my heart to revive

Until that number comes up
What should I or you do?
To help time pass by
Until our hearts renew

Should we pray for peace?
Dare to hope for something great?
As we just walk around
Living out our destined fate

Submitted on 2007-01-23 16:10:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It is a good poem. The best part in my view is the part that made me think the most.

"Is it all worth it?
All risks and dangers?
Should we risk our hearts
To complete strangers?"

For it is always a hard choice wether or not to give our time and emotions to others we know little about. Usually it works out, but strangers can always hurt, just as anyone else.

It is a good write, nice job.

~~Mykquillion
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.