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Oh mother my hands are bleeding Can you tell me it’s not that bad. Oh mother can you please stop crying It makes it hurt more to see you sad. Oh father can you calm her down? I know this isn’t very pretty. Oh father we all hate this town. Why don’t we move to the city? Where we can get a new home And maybe make a new friend And we can be free to roam And maybe start over again. Where we can follow the beats Of a talented fool And we can walk these crowded streets With a skyline so blue. Oh mother don’t take it so hard I had no choice but to fight. Oh mother our hopes run quite far. So let me show you the light. Oh father we’ll all get new jobs. If we can run away from this place. Oh father, please stop the sobs. Running down mother’s face. Oh brother won’t you listen This isn’t our kingdom. Oh brother the signs, they all glisten Beckoning to our freedom. We can get a new home And maybe make a new friend And we can be free to roam And maybe start over again. We can follow the beats Of a talented fool And we can walk these crowded streets With a skyline so blue. Oh mother it’s time to go We let this get out of hand Oh mother it just goes to show That we are just like the sand Oh father you can’t figure it out There are so many like us Oh father we cannot hold more doubt We cannot fade like the dust. We can get a new home And maybe make a new friend And we can be free to roam And maybe start over again. Oh mother my hands are bleeding Can you tell me it’s not that bad. |
I love this poem. I could relate to this alot because my family moves alot. But yeah I have to agree with ron and dimension it had great rhyme, I liked the theme, and the flow was great. Mind giving me some feedback on my work? Thanks Meg | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Megsrus aka Meg | [ Reply to This ] | I miss reading your stuff, but now that I have, I realized how much I've been missing! I like this piece alot, the flow, the rhyme, the theme. amazing, really. I loved the part about the talented fool. The entire thing actually, it's all written really well. kudos duffy. | <3 | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ] | Snake | This write is INCREDIBLE!!! By far one of your best writes I have read This flows beautifully and really takes on a life of its own with its own inground beat This write really hit home for me as I just moved back to New Jersey to help my Mom Excellent Job!!! I am making this one a Favorite!!! God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | |