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    dots Submission Name: I'm Not Shatterproof!dots
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    Author: BrokenAngelKat
    ASL Info:    20-F-NC
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 103/233/192
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 800
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsI'm Not Shatterproof!dots
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    Keep throwing your sticks,
    And your stones.
    Though on the outside I am fine,
    On the inside I am breaking.
    I'm not shatterproof.
    I can break,
    And I can fall.
    Though you may not be able to see it,
    I'll scream on the inside.
    I will try to run,
    I will fight...
    But you will never know.
    You will never see how badly
    I am losing the battle raging within..
    I'm not shatterproof.
    I'm lost,
    And I'm bleeding.
    You cant see it,
    Because I'm buried under the rubble.
    Buried under the layers of ash and chaos.
    I'm just....buried.
    Barely breathing.
    Barely hanging on...
    But you cant see that..
    Because obviously,
    You cant see me.




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 19:00:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is so similar in emotion to some of my work. I think we may have something in common. I love your work as I have seen it, and I hope you continue to create such art.
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. I like it.
    It's definitely a favorite.
    ^.^

    -Kimmi-
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Childe-Wrote | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I like the meaning in this poem. How we can make others think we are so tough but on the inside we are scared and broken. Looks can decieve. This is going on my favs! Hope to read more from you!


    Ciao,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well written and you have a lot of potential but you do need to be a little more specific about the meaning your trying to put through.
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by bloodythorn08 | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry i dont get the meaning
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]


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