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the ride


Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 40 /40 /37
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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the ride



Come one come all,
Come stand so tall,
Take my hand and hang on tight,
Dont let the the ride give you a fright,
The ride travels at excessive speed,
It makes u become in total need,
The rides pressure and pain,
Can make you insaine,
What kind of ride is this it sounds like strife,
Its the contious corners of the meaning of life.




Submitted on 2007-01-23 19:21:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this poem cant say i like ur pic too because u dont have one up lol
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]


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