Description: Another ballet poem. Dedicated to anna pavlova. Below's a little bio, or at least a short explanation.
Anna Pavlova (1881-1931)
Mikhail Fokine choreographed the "Dying Swan" for her with music from Saint-Saen's "Carnival of the Animals." It became her signature solo. .
In 1931 she contracted pneumonia, and on her death bed made the request: "Prepare my swan costume." The next night the company performed as usual, and when it came time for "The Dying Swan," the curtain opened on an empty stage. During her lifetime Pavlova inspired thousands of young dancers and had probably done more to bring ballet to the world than any other single dancer before or since.
Also like to add that i made the lines a little longer. Is it still choppy?
The bio was so sad, but really helped someone who doesn't know too much about ballet know what it's all about. I liked this piece because it shows an accurate description of what any ballerina or showperson for that matter that goes out there in the hot spotlight and gives it there blood and sweat. The audience goes crazy for it...
I liked the act two part as well. Kind of shows a continuation of it all. Like, plays still go on even after the original cast or writers have passed on. Think Shakespeare. NIce write. ~Aaron
I like the bits about the sweating and the bleeding feet. It makes it real, as everyone else said. I've read a lot about Pavlova (I'm all artsy fartsy), and this poem is a good tribute.
It did seem real, the choppiness. I thought it expressed the work behind the beauty, as you were trying to get across. Like two for one. I believe I read somewhere that that night she got a standing o. I think the second stanza was my favorite. Graceful and tragic at the same time.
i like the poem because you chose somthing differnt to base it on I dont know if you do ballet but it seems like a very emotional piece that you are part of but if not its a very colorfull poem tha tyou did a good job on
i don't know much about ballet or anna pavlova... but it sounds like a whole other world out there. this is a beautiful poem because it gives me an insider's view of this other world. nice one - really liked it.
colorfull as in descritiptive words that create more of a picture like the fallen swan you do alot with that to create a very vivd picture w/ in the swan
Submission Name: Feathered Dancer
