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    dots Submission Name: Feathered Dancerdots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Another ballet poem. Dedicated to anna pavlova. Below's a little bio, or at least a short explanation.


    Anna Pavlova (1881-1931)

    Mikhail Fokine choreographed the "Dying Swan" for her with music from Saint-Saen's "Carnival of the Animals." It became her signature solo. .

    In 1931 she contracted pneumonia, and on her death bed made the request: "Prepare my swan costume." The next night the company performed as usual, and when it came time for "The Dying Swan," the curtain opened on an empty stage. During her lifetime Pavlova inspired thousands of young dancers and had probably done more to bring ballet to the world than any other single dancer before or since.


    Also like to add that i made the lines a little longer. Is it still choppy?


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    dotsFeathered Dancerdots
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    Feathered dancers
    Cannot fly above the catwalk
    But can swim around stageright

    Artificial sun beating down on
    Drenched foreheads
    Though they'll work their charm
    Like always until the stage is
    Red
    With blood

    Act two:
    The dying swan
    Is reincarnated
    Once again




    Submitted on 2004-06-04 21:57:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The bio was so sad, but really helped someone who doesn't know too much about ballet know what it's all about. I liked this piece because it shows an accurate description of what any ballerina or showperson for that matter that goes out there in the hot spotlight and gives it there blood and sweat. The audience goes crazy for it...

    I liked the act two part as well. Kind of shows a continuation of it all. Like, plays still go on even after the original cast or writers have passed on. Think Shakespeare. NIce write.
    ~Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-06-05 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the bits about the sweating and the bleeding feet. It makes it real, as everyone else said. I've read a lot about Pavlova (I'm all artsy fartsy), and this poem is a good tribute.
    | Posted on 2004-06-05 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      It did seem real, the choppiness. I thought it expressed the work behind the beauty, as you were trying to get across. Like two for one. I believe I read somewhere that that night she got a standing o. I think the second stanza was my favorite. Graceful and tragic at the same time.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-06-04 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the poem because you chose somthing differnt to base it on I dont know if you do ballet but it seems like a very emotional piece that you are part of but if not its a very colorfull poem tha tyou did a good job on
    | Posted on 2004-06-04 00:00:00 | by casey | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't know much about ballet or anna pavlova... but it sounds like a whole other world out there. this is a beautiful poem because it gives me an insider's view of this other world.
    nice one - really liked it.
    | Posted on 2004-06-04 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      colorfull as in descritiptive words that create more of a picture like the fallen swan you do alot with that to create a very vivd picture w/ in the swan
    | Posted on 2004-06-08 00:00:00 | by casey | [ Reply to This ]


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