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Author: _Phoenix
ASL Info:    18/F/FL
Elite Ratio:    4.56 - 46 /31 /21
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /I hate you
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written in my sophomore year; i specifically remember a boy who teased me mercilessly. i wanted revenge. just for the record, it was never followed through. -smirk-
enjoy. - Phoenix


Want to kill him
Want him dead
Want his damned voice out of my head
Want to see him
Tortured and blind
Trapped in the agony
Of his own mind.
Fueled by purest loathing
My motives plain and clear
Before I wipe him from the face of Earth
Eliminate all that he holds dear.
Driven by sheer hatred
My emotions running strong
I plot out my expert murder
No longer recognizing right from wrong.
Who is this person I loathe so much
That I want mutilated,
So I won't have wasted my breath?
This you will never know
For that is my secret
As is his death.

Submitted on 2007-01-23 20:01:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Damn, someone was angry, hell you made me angry for a moment, sorry bout the [censored], but hey at least he gave a kick ass inspiration. Your emotions certainly ran rampant, and set everything to fire, my breath, my heart, my computer screen everything. Still the rhyming scheme seemed to hold it back and the words didn't seem very colorful, but still awesome, anything that stops my heart for a second and makes me same damn must be good, very fluent and original, 8.5 out of 10. Spread your words like fire.

Sincerely yours with a bloody kiss,
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
  This write is extremely well written
You show your peers andf those of us who are older just how much abuse ofm the verbal kind can torture a person
I was picked on and tortured as a child unmercifely through High School as well so I know exactly of the pain you are speaking of
I know you are starting to feel better by letting this emotion out
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This was written very well. It flowed nicely, was worded greatly, and rhymed magnificently. I liked it very much, it portrayed your anger so well, and reminded so much of people who angered me before that I felt like punching a wall. That is a sign of a GREAT write. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

Saint Razor
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]

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