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    dots Submission Name: Repetitive sunrisesdots
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    Author: redeemer
    ASL Info:    19/female/venus
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 85/93/58
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRepetitive sunrisesdots
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    Another sunrise, means another day
    Another day, that I must spend without you,
    Without you, I will watch the sun sink,
    The sun sinks, and I sleep alone,
    I sleep alone, and will wake to another sunrise

    Repetitiveness is the endless tetering in my mind
    I try and hold on, hoping a new sunrise, will bring a better day
    But the day rots, and sinks into the horizon
    I can't watch the days pass anymore

    So I shrink into the dark abisis of solitude
    It's not so bad, when you've been alone so long
    But I am left to wonder why life had turned out this way
    Losing you did this to me, tortures me so

    The darkness gathers in my mind and around my life
    It's no wonder you left me, aparently I'm insane
    I will not survive this life much longer
    Not with you gone, leaving me to the fear in my own eyes

    Look into them, can you see the terror in my soul
    The wrath in my heart??
    Vainly I will take my own life, being to terrified to face the sunrise and set alone
    I'd walk to the ends of the earth to be with you
    But you won't roll over and face me and save me from this nightmare

    I eventually drift into oblivion
    Now realizing that I've been dreaming all along
    Our love was never really real
    It was a fantasy in my mind, that I suppose I really, really wanted to feel....




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 21:46:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah,this is a very sad hopeless poem.Ive read many like it(a lot of people are sad nowadays) but this is very well written too.I mean its hard to look at something so raw and full of emotion and try to see it from an artistic stand-point, but you had some really good images there:

    "I'd walk to the ends of the earth to be with you
    But you won't roll over and face me and save me from this nightmare"

    This is such a relatable line (for me anyway).

    and I get what you mean,even something as naturally beautiful as a sun-rise can be hideous when you are low in yourself and no longer have someone to love.

    Although it could be argued you should love yourself first I think that in life it is impossible to love someone else and keep that same love you have for yourself at the same time,thats why it feels like theres nothing left when you break-up.

    So the sun-rise can wait seeing as how they're endless,and inevitably you'll appreciate it again,when you've resolved things and are ready to look at it.

    When I feel bad I normally turn into a recluse too,and your right its not so bad,Id rather not have everyone marching happily around me if I feel depressed.

    But yeah,its an unproductive necvessity to feel this way after a break-up and your poem illustrates that.

    I really liked it anyway...

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS REMInds me so much of me in life after love, very saddening almost makes you feel worthless. But that is not all. Yes, we all try to feel but time comes and we must start to believe and rise to another level, not just the need to feel but the decision to move and breathe. I for one am born again- i struggle with such feeelings but Jesus gives me the strength and life to recognise the meaning of a new sunrise each day-they are beautiful gurl, start to enjoy them.
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]


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