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    dots Submission Name: Subsequential Damnation(Missing Himdots
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    Author: itsjustme22
    ASL Info:    19/f/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 237/114/38
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 237
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 720



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       I miss my love so badly. i cant stand it.


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    dotsSubsequential Damnation(Missing Himdots
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    A headache;
    a stomach ache;
    a heartache;
    love has consolidated;
    my soul is constricted.

    A gain of great love,
    a loss of much youth,
    a hint of some hope,
    a slap of the truth.

    Tired eyes;
    broken ties;
    departed time;
    three months gone- fine;
    my heart is sunken.

    Smile with a kiss,
    close the eyes with a hug,
    a face abandoned grim,
    mouth and lips turned smug.

    Anticipated exhalation;
    nothing ever with explanation;
    unconditioinally our creation;
    the result is subsequential damnation;
    my life is filled: yet so vacant,
    without you.




    Submitted on 2007-01-23 23:15:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its a good poem i liked reading it n whoeva he iss hes a lucky lad
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]
      I can definately feel ur longing in the write. My brother is in the military and he's coming home 2day or 2m for about 2 wks b4 he goes back to Iraq for another 10 months or so....it sucks that ur love is so far away, but you will get to c him again and stick to that it might help a lil. Anyway, I think this is a fantastic write and keep ur head up.
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      I just love this poem. It has a quality of reading a diary entry. I love the way the stanzas are independent yet still are tied together. Once again this is an awsome poem. Keep on writing.

    :) Selene
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel this poem, and I have a pretty good feeling it's about someone leaving you. I had this feeling for months when my ex-husband left me. Well, gadamn.. good job. I couldn't have put it much better myself.
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Betty Brutal | [ Reply to This ]
      ok i just read that three times and all i can say is good work. I do struggle however to work out whether it is a poem about lost love, teen pregnancy, or something entirely different. Over all a good write ****
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Dispair | [ Reply to This ]



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