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    dots Submission Name: Natures Seductiondots
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    Author: Amanda Lynn
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    Words: 129
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    The stars came down to dance with me,
    singing there celestial rhapsody.
    Swirling, whirling and bowing to and fro,
    never leaving my sight,
    refusing to let me go.
    Shining down just for me,
    seducing me in the night,
    Nature’s sweetest symphony
    adding to the delight.
    The dew on the grass softly licking my toes.
    The mist in the air kissing my nose.
    The stars in my eyes,
    the softest of sighs,
    the winds singing the sweetest lullabies.
    Taking me in its arms,
    whisking me away
    Using Natures purest charms,
    to convince me to stay.
    The song of twilight
    played only for me.
    Lover to the night,
    dancing so free.
    Allowing myself to become
    Natures most treasured pawn,
    all the while praying
    “let there be no dawn”.




    Submitted on 2007-01-24 10:30:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A delightful fantasy that moves quickly ... an enchanted and ehchanting piece of poetry so deftly done, whimsical and dreamlike ... excellent ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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