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    dots Submission Name: Another Sad Love Poemdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       Another sad love poem....


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    dotsAnother Sad Love Poemdots
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    Screaming his name
    He doesn't care
    Touching his skin
    It's like I'm not there
    Telling him my inner most thoughts
    He spills them out
    My help he never sought
    I'm here!
    For when you need me
    I love you so much
    Why can't you see?
    I'm you little lapdog
    Just here to please
    Trying to find where I belong
    Anything to put his mind at ease
    Everyone warns me
    "He is no good!"
    But they don't realize
    I don't do what I should
    I fell hard and fast
    He is the one guy
    I can't seem to get over and past




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is definitely another sad love poem like many,I guess this is just the way things are with "love".
    Its written well enough but Ive read stuff like this a million time(exaggeration),still that shouldn't detract from this piece,its not too self pitying and its smart so yeah i liked it.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I've definitely been through a relationship like that. Good Job.

    -Kaitlyn.
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem completely describes how my past relationships are....he doesn't even realize your there. This is a great write. It speaks to my heart. Keep on writing.
    ~chelle
    | Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]


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