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    dots Submission Name: Motion Mandots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 831
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 323



    Description:
       it one of those that you ether like it or dont, also it has that circle kind of format.


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    dotsMotion Mandots
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    Motion man, motion man
    please tell me gods plan

    plan man, plan man
    please tell me where to go

    Go man, go man
    please just tell me why

    Why man, why man
    please tell me whats in motion

    Motion man, motion man
    please tell me gods plan




    Submitted on 2007-01-24 17:44:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like how it looked like you were seeking something but then you realize that you wont know the future till you get there.cute
    7 outta 10
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this
    In the few short words used you described life perfectly
    You showed us Your readers how life is always moving forward but our memories will always be there to bring the who;e picture together
    Excellent Work
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    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, an ocean of motion here! What is " the plan" indeed! a man plan a canal panama ... spell it backwards and its spooky ... nicely and very deftly done poem ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ...
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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