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    dots Submission Name: Numbdots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       like all my work you will like it or hate it most people hate the way i format my writings

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Ive become so numb
    the person i am
    is who ill be
    not the person
    that you want me to be

    your there, all the time
    happy as can be
    no longer waiting for me

    ive become so numb
    i just wont feel
    feel what WAS there

    For thats no longer part of me

    Submitted on 2007-01-24 17:49:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I actually enjoy the format you write in
    I find it very origanel and one can read the write exactly as you have written it to feel all the emotion you conceal inside your words
    In this write
    I can feel the sadness trying to envelope your soul
    I have fought that sadness for a very long time in my life
    It wasnt until I started looking for and finding the Positive to every negative in my life that I started feeling better
    Excellent work!!!
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i like your format. very sylvia plath. so you are numb. hm. are you unable to feel are you not letting yourself feel? are you afraid of never again finding what you lost? or am i way of base? oh well. still like your format though. you repeat words a lot, but if thats what floats your boat, then rock on.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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