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    dots Submission Name: Power flawdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this one has been a long time ini work but im not sure if it is quite done that will be up to you to decide.


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    dotsPower flawdots
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    The elements of the chaos theory
    falling apart,
    time goes by,
    nothing changes,
    everyones free,
    no one fights,
    not even for what is right.

    Here i am
    left alone,
    understanding it all,
    but nothing changes,
    no one fights,
    not even for what is right.




    Submitted on 2007-01-24 17:53:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      agreed
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      im inclined to disagree. no one fights? false. no one fights about things that actually matter? true. everyone makes up these petty little problems so that they can have a reason to get pity from other people. its quite frankly ridiculous. but all of us do it anyway. anyway, nice write. provoking thought is always a good sign.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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