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    dots Submission Name: Come and kill medots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 902
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 318



    Description:
       this is part of a song i wrote/composed. the lyrics are amazing to me but this is the best part of the whole thing and i want people to know about it. if you want to hear the song email me at plague180@yahoo.com and ill send it to you.


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    dotsCome and kill medots
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    Decomposition
    Death to me
    Just like her
    Assassination
    I wasnt there
    I didnt see it But i was
    Hit by the bullet
    It went into her
    Throught me
    and exited into a tree
    Cops all around
    Looking at body's
    Thinking of the lifes we had...




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      I wasnt there
    I didnt see it But i was
    Hit by the bullet


    SOmething about that striked me,
    it seems to be a theme, empathy in many of the pieces I have read on here today.


    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      hey I would love to hear this song! you have my e-mail so plzzzzzzzz send it to me!!
    <3candy!<3333333333
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      lives not lifes.. im a nag. sorry. other than that it was good.
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing!Thats All I Gotta Say.
    10 outta 10!
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely said and VER visual! I like it all it was a short story in a poem! I like how it was so dramatic! Cops all around
    Looking at body's
    Thinking of the lifes we had...
    I liked that keep it up good job peace & stay safe

    P.S
    Thanx for the favorite add!
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Good stuff. I like that decomposition... Death to me. ooo they are lyrics, cool. The rythm (that I see/hear) sounds really good. What kind of genre would it be? Yeah, you are one of the newest people I critisized and this was a positive one! I would like to here the whole thing... Are your lyrics from experience?
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      I would love to hear the song but I can never get in my yahoo anymore.... if you can please send it to me and I will find a way to listen to it....

    allmine_2008@yahoo.com

    candy(amanda)
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      that hit me like - well- yes... a BULLET.

    i would rather much like to hear the song.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Kai Nishimura | [ Reply to This ]
      I remember you reading this to me in the park. HOw you explained that its a lot more cheery then people see at first. That was a fun day

    :) tennisfuzz
    | Posted on 2007-02-05 00:00:00 | by tennisfuzz | [ Reply to This ]


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