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the turn

Author: thewantedwords
ASL Info:    28 male sydney
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Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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the turn

Allthough life is traveling forward the feeling seems behind,
Having alot of moments were i myself is hard 2 find,
Wanderen down the crooked tracks were did my life begin 2 fail,
Was it when my life took a wrong turn was when my life derailed,
Do we follow the tracks or do we make a turn,
So why is when we fall of the tracks we all seem to burn,
as we travel it seems an effort just for us to wait,
but the moment when we jump of the tracks is the moment we see our fate.

Submitted on 2007-01-24 19:20:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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