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    dots Submission Name: I want to be the girl in my dreamsdots
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    Author: deathbroken
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 57/142/38
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wanted so much to be like her, the girl in my dreams. She's perfect, flawless, while Im not....


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    dotsI want to be the girl in my dreamsdots
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    She has everything I don't
    She's got everything I want
    She's the best and I'm the worst
    She's my enemy,
    But I'm her friend.

    She knows me well
    as much as I know her
    She watches me with sad eyes
    Knowing what's going through my head

    I glare at her with anger
    furious that I'm not her
    We're so alike we're different
    Standing side by side

    Two pairs of eyes staring at the sea
    I felt plain and simple beside her
    beauty, elegance, kindness
    everything i wanted to have.

    I stared at her
    anger, envy, sadness
    filled my eyes as i admired her
    She's my Idol. my model.

    The one I want to be
    But she lies only in my dreams.




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      I really liked this, it's the first thing by you I've read, and it comes across as sincere and well written, very nice. I will just make a simple comment on my view. Flawlessness isn't perfect. Think on it, maybe write something on it, idk. I find that flawlessness and repitition are the number one reasons I feel bored with the world.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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