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    dots Submission Name: Games...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Its somewhat old but the feelings are still there


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    dotsGames...dots
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    I feel so abounded
    My thoughts are gloomy

    "There is no need for this"
    Part of me says

    "Your alone, tired scared... and hurt,
    There is no need for such feelings"

    Another part of me barks back.

    See, I am stuck in this on going battle
    Itís with no one but Me, Myself, and I

    I'm playing tug-a-war with these thoughts..
    Debating with myself
    Whether I should be feeling this way

    I long to be accepted
    To be normal...
    And I look for you
    To give me these feelings

    And yet I shall not allow myself
    To look for such feelings in another
    I shall not give another this amount of power

         Yet I am and I have..
         And here it goes again..
         This inevitable game of "Tug-A-War"




    Submitted on 2007-01-25 06:34:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, the seemingly "eternal" question of acceptance -- "do others see us as we see ourselves?" the answer is often surprising...nicely expostulated difficulty with arguments and counter arguments ... bravo ... brave ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-01-25 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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