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    dots Submission Name: Total Eclipsedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsTotal Eclipsedots
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    Heart beats unison,
    United once felt her seduction.
    The twilight by eclipse,
    Brightened ultraviolet rays mix.
    This once in a life time event surreal,
    The ubiquitous love you can feel.
    The orb of lightís prestige glow,
    Hearts in total alignment begins to flow.
    Hearts begin to integrate will show,
    The heartís halo light,
    Turned to silver moon gloom forever bright.




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